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Zeppix - Scene 5
ExWhyZed Sat Apr 17, 2010 7:06 pm
Scene V
Zeppix is in front of a large mirror. He sees he has wings.
Zeppix: Good Lord... How? WHAT?!
Monindio: Calm down, Zeppix.
Zeppix: But I've got damn WINGS, man! What the HELL?!
Monindio: Yes, you do. Try flapping them.
Zeppix does so, and hovers in the air a little.
Zeppix: Wow!
Monindio: The rest you learn with practise.
Monindio shoves Zeppix off the side of the hole, and Zeppix falls. He gets his balance, and flies back up again.
Monindio: Your weapons will be in your room. Go there, and you will find them. Come back to me.
Monindio wanders off.
Zeppix: Wait! Where is my room? Damnit. He's gone.
A pale purple female daemon approaches Zeppix.
Malla: Never mind Monindio, Zeppix. He's always like this. Your room, I think, is number 3267. That's one floor up from here.
Zeppix: Thanks. Hey; what's happening around here?
Malla: Myroel and Vaizarr sword... I don't really want to talk about it...
Zeppix: Who's Myroel? Who's Vaizarr?
Malla: Shush! Careless talk... Now get to your room!
Zeppix wanders up the stairs.
Zeppix is in front of a large mirror. He sees he has wings.
Zeppix: Good Lord... How? WHAT?!
Monindio: Calm down, Zeppix.
Zeppix: But I've got damn WINGS, man! What the HELL?!
Monindio: Yes, you do. Try flapping them.
Zeppix does so, and hovers in the air a little.
Zeppix: Wow!
Monindio: The rest you learn with practise.
Monindio shoves Zeppix off the side of the hole, and Zeppix falls. He gets his balance, and flies back up again.
Monindio: Your weapons will be in your room. Go there, and you will find them. Come back to me.
Monindio wanders off.
Zeppix: Wait! Where is my room? Damnit. He's gone.
A pale purple female daemon approaches Zeppix.
Malla: Never mind Monindio, Zeppix. He's always like this. Your room, I think, is number 3267. That's one floor up from here.
Zeppix: Thanks. Hey; what's happening around here?
Malla: Myroel and Vaizarr sword... I don't really want to talk about it...
Zeppix: Who's Myroel? Who's Vaizarr?
Malla: Shush! Careless talk... Now get to your room!
Zeppix wanders up the stairs.
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Re: Zeppix - Scene 5
Kyon Sat Apr 17, 2010 10:27 pm
"Myroel and Vaizarr sword"
Thats no sentence xD
Maybe he says: "Myroel and Vaizarr fought"
Other then that, it is awesome.
What should Scene 5 be about?
And maybe, Maybe I put a flashback or flash-forward between scene 3 and 4.
But I am not sure.
Not the actual fight between the leaders. That comes later.
Also Zed, I guess I make Zeppix in Episodes.
But the episodes will more be like 'parts' of the movie/serie.
So, at one point, something really exciting is happening.
Then it says: "To be Continued..."
Why I do this?
- Because then it is even more exciting
- Because then Zeppix isn't a one time thing, but people are gonna 'follow' the serie.
- Because then I can release it sooner.
Great job on helping me man!
I really hope you can do some voices soon...
Thats no sentence xD
Maybe he says: "Myroel and Vaizarr fought"
Other then that, it is awesome.
What should Scene 5 be about?
And maybe, Maybe I put a flashback or flash-forward between scene 3 and 4.
But I am not sure.
Not the actual fight between the leaders. That comes later.
Also Zed, I guess I make Zeppix in Episodes.
But the episodes will more be like 'parts' of the movie/serie.
So, at one point, something really exciting is happening.
Then it says: "To be Continued..."
Why I do this?
- Because then it is even more exciting
- Because then Zeppix isn't a one time thing, but people are gonna 'follow' the serie.
- Because then I can release it sooner.
Great job on helping me man!
I really hope you can do some voices soon...
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Re: Zeppix - Scene 5
ExWhyZed Sun Apr 18, 2010 11:23 am
Me too, and yeah, I meant fought.
Perhaps, in between scene three and four, it continues from Scene I? So this is scene V, and scene IV is whatever happens after that.
Perhaps, in between scene three and four, it continues from Scene I? So this is scene V, and scene IV is whatever happens after that.
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Re: Zeppix - Scene 5
Kyon Sun Apr 18, 2010 11:41 am
Hm, maybe.
I make this topic "Scene V" instead of 4.
I make an other topic for Scene IV
I make this topic "Scene V" instead of 4.
I make an other topic for Scene IV
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Re: Zeppix - Scene 5
TP09 Sun Apr 18, 2010 6:04 pm
TP09 wrote:Edited Zephyr's attempt:
Zeppix is in front of a large mirror. He sees he has wings.
Zeppix: Good Lord... How? WHAT?!
Zeppix quickly turns around to have a closer look at his wings.
Monindio: Calm down, Zeppix.
Zeppix:ButI've got damn WINGS, man! What the HELL?! (<< more talking to himself than to Monindio)
Monindio: Yes, you do. Try flapping them.
Zeppix does so, and hovers in the air a little.
Zeppix: Wow!
Monindio: Don't be afraid, learn to control your wings. Master the airspace.
Monindio shoves Zeppix off the side of the hole, and Zeppix falls. He gets his balance, and flies back up again.
Monindio: Your weapons are in your room. Go there, take them and come back to me.
Monindio wanders off.
Zeppix: Wait! Where is my room? Crap.He's gone.(<< why is Zeppix talking to himself so much?!)
A pale purple female daemon approaches Zeppix.
Malla: Never mind Monindio, Zeppix. He's always like this. Your room, I think,is number 3267. That's one floor up from here.
Zeppix: Thanks. Hey; what's happening around here?
Malla: Myroel and Vaizarr fought... I don't really want to talk about it...
Zeppix: Who's Myroel? Who's Vaizarr?
Malla: Shush! Careless talk... Now get to your room!
Zeppix: NO! I want to know what happened to me! (<< it seems a bit unrealistic to me if Zeppix immediately follows her order.)
Zeppix: Please explain now.
Malla: Soon, dear Zeppix. Soon.
Malla turns around and wanders off.
Zeppix wanders up the stairs.
Last edited by TP09 on Sun Apr 18, 2010 9:42 pm; edited 1 time in total
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Re: Zeppix - Scene 5
Kyon Sun Apr 18, 2010 7:21 pm
Malla = Sylnyte
But uhm,
yes you are right.
Zeppix should be more worried.
Put yourself in his position.
You 'suddenly' got taken by a daemon to a weird place.
And you got wings, and you need to go to your room.
All very weird.
we need to edit his reactions.
But uhm,
yes you are right.
Zeppix should be more worried.
Put yourself in his position.
You 'suddenly' got taken by a daemon to a weird place.
And you got wings, and you need to go to your room.
All very weird.
we need to edit his reactions.
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Re: Zeppix - Scene 5
ExWhyZed Sun Apr 18, 2010 8:47 pm
Redone my version.
Scene V
Zeppix is in front of a large mirror. He sees he has wings.
Zeppix: Good Lord... How? WHAT?!
Monindio: Calm down, Zeppix.
Zeppix turns to Monindio.
Zeppix: But I've got damn WINGS, man! What the HELL?! I'm human!
Monindio: Ahem... Yes, you do have wings. Try flapping them.
Zeppix does so, and hovers in the air a little.
Zeppix: Wow! But I don't understand?
Monindio: Quiet. You will be taught by me every day until you are trained enough. Let me see how you cope at teh moment...
Monindio shoves Zeppix off the side of the hole, and Zeppix falls. He gets his balance, and flies back up again.
Monindio: Your weapons will be in your room. Go there, and you will find them. Come back to me.
Monindio wanders off.
Zeppix: Wait! I have a room? Where? I have so many questions! Damn it. He's gone.
Sylnyte approaches Zeppix.
Sylnyte: Never mind Monindio, Zeppix. He's always like this. Your room, is number 3267. That's one floor up from here.
Zeppix: Thanks. Hey; what's happening around here? Can you answer my questions?
Sylnyte: Myroel and Vaizarr fought... I don't really want to talk about it...
Zeppix: Who's Myroel? Who's Vaizarr? What about...
Sylnyte: Shush! Careless talk... Now get to your room!
Zeppix: But...
Sylnyte: That's an order.
Zeppix wanders up the stairs.[/quote]
Scene V
Zeppix is in front of a large mirror. He sees he has wings.
Zeppix: Good Lord... How? WHAT?!
Monindio: Calm down, Zeppix.
Zeppix turns to Monindio.
Zeppix: But I've got damn WINGS, man! What the HELL?! I'm human!
Monindio: Ahem... Yes, you do have wings. Try flapping them.
Zeppix does so, and hovers in the air a little.
Zeppix: Wow! But I don't understand?
Monindio: Quiet. You will be taught by me every day until you are trained enough. Let me see how you cope at teh moment...
Monindio shoves Zeppix off the side of the hole, and Zeppix falls. He gets his balance, and flies back up again.
Monindio: Your weapons will be in your room. Go there, and you will find them. Come back to me.
Monindio wanders off.
Zeppix: Wait! I have a room? Where? I have so many questions! Damn it. He's gone.
Sylnyte approaches Zeppix.
Sylnyte: Never mind Monindio, Zeppix. He's always like this. Your room, is number 3267. That's one floor up from here.
Zeppix: Thanks. Hey; what's happening around here? Can you answer my questions?
Sylnyte: Myroel and Vaizarr fought... I don't really want to talk about it...
Zeppix: Who's Myroel? Who's Vaizarr? What about...
Sylnyte: Shush! Careless talk... Now get to your room!
Zeppix: But...
Sylnyte: That's an order.
Zeppix wanders up the stairs.[/quote]
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Re: Zeppix - Scene 5
Kyon Sun Apr 25, 2010 4:43 pm
Redone the part of 'seeing the wings':
Zeppix: Good lord... How? What!?
Monindio: Zeppix, calm down.
Zeppix: I... I don't understand, what does this mean?
Monindio: I tell you when the time is right.
Zeppix: What the heck is going on!!!
Monindio: You have to learn how to use your wings. Lets hope you find a way.
Monindio pushes Zeppix, and Zeppix falls down.
Zeppix: WHAT THE HELL!? NOOOO
Zeppix finds his balance, and flies up.
Zeppix: What was that about?!
Monindio: You've just learned how to fly.
Zeppix looks very confusing.
Go to your room, you need sleep.
Zeppix: My room? Where-
Monindio is gone.
Zeppix: Good lord... How? What!?
Monindio: Zeppix, calm down.
Zeppix: I... I don't understand, what does this mean?
Monindio: I tell you when the time is right.
Zeppix: What the heck is going on!!!
Monindio: You have to learn how to use your wings. Lets hope you find a way.
Monindio pushes Zeppix, and Zeppix falls down.
Zeppix: WHAT THE HELL!? NOOOO
Zeppix finds his balance, and flies up.
Zeppix: What was that about?!
Monindio: You've just learned how to fly.
Zeppix looks very confusing.
Go to your room, you need sleep.
Zeppix: My room? Where-
Monindio is gone.
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